Most of us would probably feel a bit awkward living in a town named after ourselves. "I'm John Lundberg from Lundberg town just up the road. It's awesome." And I would feel even more awkward writing a poem about how much I loved Lundberg town.
But such is the legacy of James Abbott, a general in the British Army in India in the mid-19th century, after whom Abbottabad is named (it's unclear, but he may have actually named the town after himself). Abbott was so taken by his town that he wrote a rather long and cloying poem about it -- a poem that has been set in stone on a plaque in the Abbottabad town square.
The Guardian's Stephen Moss thinks Abbott's poem is one of the worst ever written, genuinely wondering if "maybe it was written in Urdu and this is a literal translation by someone for whom English is not their first language." Which is also, by the way, something you do not want to hear in a poetry workshop. How bad is it? I don't know that we need to send the SEALs back in to take it out, but it's bad. See for yourself:
I remember the day when I first came here
And smelt the sweet Abbottabad air
The trees and ground covered with snow
Gave us indeed a brilliant show
To me the place seemed like a dream
And far ran a lonesome stream
The wind hissed as if welcoming us
The pine swayed creating a lot of fuss
And the tiny cuckoo sang it away
A song very melodious and gay
I adored the place from the first sight
And was happy that my coming here was right
And eight good years here passed very soon
And we leave you perhaps on a sunny noon
Oh, Abbottabad, we are leaving you now
To your natural beauty do I bow
Perhaps your wind's sound will never reach my ear
My gift for you is a few sad tears
I bid you farewell with a heavy heart
Never from my mind will your memories thwart.
Abbott's poem does gives us a sense -- a disjointed, arrhythmical sense -- of what Abbottabad is like, with its sweet air, lonesome stream, fussy (fussy?) pines, tiny happy cuckoos, and (oh, look!) terrorists. Speaking of which, poor James Abbott would no doubt be quite shaken to learn about this whole bin Laden mess happening in his idyllic, eponymous little town -- so let's hope the news never reaches his eternally resting ear in whatever region of the afterlife he's named after himself.
The lesson here, I guess, is that when you name a town after yourself, you'd better keep an eye on it. There would be no terrorists in Lundberg town (or fussy pines, for that matter). I can promise you that.
But it doesn't have the extreme, so-bad-it's-good awfulness of the great William McGonagall.
From "The Tay Bridge Disaster":
As soon as the catastrophe came to be known
The alarm from mouth to mouth was blown,
And the cry rang out all o'er the town,
Good Heavens! the Tay Bridge is blown down,
And a passenger train from Edinburgh,
Which fill'd all the people's hearts with sorrow,
And made them for to turn pale,
Because none of the passengers were sav'd to tell the tale
How the disaster happen'd on the last Sabbath day of 1879,
Which will be remember'd for a very long time.
Anyone who has taught poetry to students has experienced worst poems, which is probably why so many English Teachers drink or seriously consider that as an option. Good poems take both talent and skill.
I would bet that poem was written in English, and not translated from Urdu, because of the rhymes.
It has very bad rhymes but no rhythm. My guess is that a translation would at least one good image or metaphor.
General Abbott's poem
Is set in stone
And rhymes without a reason
But to the people of Abbotabad, it may well represent the pinnacle of English literature.
No wonder they hate our freedoms.
[[[ apperently Abbottabad didnt house any peopel, any fussy locals; they probably left and formed a Khanobad nearby ]]]
it gives credence to the notion ,which still abounded in canada in the 1950's, that the british empire was run by boy scouts and girl guides . why if it had been run by Prussians it might have been efficient or something
who cares that the boundary between Pakistan and Afghanistan is an artifact of the british empire; where's the natural boundary; its like having 1/3 of the population of Quebec in Ontario and a fence between them
if politicians [ americans who obviously want to name pakistan after themselves ] havnt proposed a economic union between pakistan and afghanistan they dont know reality
[ ditto India and pakistan which need to form an economic union ]]
Peace and love -- from within, below, and above (I could not resist).
The above was no poetry, but it was a poetic attempt at humbly saying thanks and be well.